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=Ronniere Whaley= A Collection of my Tenth Grade English Writings

Annotated Table of Contents Academic Writing Academic Resume Seat Belts on School Buses and Revisions Literature Writing
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Annotated Table of Contents ** Section I: Academic Writing This section includes my academic resume and a sample application essay. Most of this writing was developed in class. The resume highlights my school envelopment including my classes school activities, and community service. The essay may be adapted for future use. The resume has been on share point where it can be updated regularly.
 * Date || Title of Assignment || Focus Area(s) || Comments || Reflection ||
 * September 15th || Pre Test Writing Prompt || Opinion || I think that this was a good way to get my mind set on school preferably English || I think i could have done better by planning more efficiently but this will be the first of many the 2009-2010 school year. ||
 * January 20th || Essay Revision || MLA Format and Pronoun Antecedent || I thought it was an interesting assignment I never really had a chance to work on one of this type of project. I never got to finish but wanted to. || I had learned alot about my name by having to write about it. I dug deep and found feeling and meanings that i never knew of. ||
 * February 4th || Exam Essay || Comparison of pronoun Antecedents || I found it a slightly hard to adjust to this somewhat new way of constructing sentences. || I think if i actually had a little more time to grasp how to use pronoun antecedent i would have been able to do better. ||
 * February 26th || Research Paper || MLA Documentation || The Effects of Cyber Crime || I had a lot of fun trying to find all the information i could for this research paper, making my main goal to have the most sources possible ||

Section II: School Buses and Seat Belts On this essay I tried my hardest to imagine these seat belts on my everyday school bus. I imagined the feeling I would have and then elevated them to the platform that would be the bases this writing. I think I did very well with arguing and giving Ideas that support my opinion of seat belts on buses. Also, I think I had a pretty decent choose of vocabulary words. Thinking of the best bits and pieces to put in this essay really brought my true feelings to the surface. Finally I thought I lacked proper punctuation and my paper didn't quite flow when it was read, and it wasn't an overall smooth piece of writing.

** Academic Writing **

My name is Ronniere Whaley a child of engulfed by music at an early age. People listen to a song once or twice and think they know all about it yet when the melodic vibrations of any 8 to 6 to 80 to even 400 bar barring song my mind bisects. As far as biology or anatomy goes every organism is made up of organs, organs that aid the life form to efficiently exist. To me no two waves of sound are the same wether it is duplicated or replicated; there is always an imperfection that separates the two. I am an ordinary human being with the super human passion for music. I am a student enrolled in the school of harmony and rhythm for life. I am a person taking advantage of my fortune by buying the equipment and joining classes to better myself and my craft. I have the dedication of a desperate man in a subway with only a saxophone and an open case begging for the trade of soulful music for the smallest amount of money to make his way back home. With my hands, I have the ability to create life, the life of song, the life of music. Not as wonderful as Gods creations of Man, animals, plants, water, and so much more but the creations God would choose to express or interoperate his creations music. I live for music for: rock n’ roll, hip hop, jazz, smooth jazz, rap, opera, classical, country, pop, international music, and anything that anyone calls music.

** Resume **

Ronniere Whaley

5913 Glen View Drive, Virginia Beach VA

Home 757-479-2105

Email: __Ronniere_whaley@yahoo.com__

Personal Information

Date of Birth: August 26, 1993

Place of Birth: Virginia Beach, VA

Objective

Short Term: Graduate form High School with Advanced Diploma

Long Term: To be accepted to Central North Carolina University

Education

2008- Present: Tallwood High

Global Studies and world Language Academy 1668 Kempsville Road

Virginia Beach, VA 23464

Class Rank: 275

GPA: 2.46

Advanced Course

2009- Present:

World Literature and Composition II

AP Human Geography

2008-2009

World Literature and Composition I

Specialized Courses

2009-Present:

Global Cultures

International Business and Trade 2008-2009 Global Issues International Careers

Honors and Awards

2009-Present: Honor Roll

2008-2009 Acceptance into the Global Studies and World Languages Academy

Community Activities

2009-Present

Centerville Elementary School after school program volunteer

2008-2009:

Brandon Middle School Track and Field team

PTSA

Gulu Walk

An All American Track and Field Athlete AAU

AAu Junior Olympic Finalist

Special Skills

Track and Field Specialist

Technologically Advanced

Music Production/Composition/Engineering

Hobbies and Interest

Music Production

Track and Field

World Travel

Extensive travel throughout the United States

Bahamas

Bermuda

Haiti

Barbados

Hawaii

France

Canada

Belgium

** Seat Belts on School Buses **

When it comes to riding in a car or vehicle the first thing that comes to mind is buckling up. Yet in my mind buses are totally different. (Taking the time to fasten a seat belt on the bus is being a tad over protective.) A bus is constructed so if it were to be in a road collision that the students would be able to withstand the impact. Also, sanitation is another important factor because in modern day a lower less people would be willing to touch not mentioning secure a public seat belt around them. As the school system are receiving a pay cut I also, do not see them paying the money to install over 60 seat belts per bus. Pertaining to the seat belts how would a three to a seat rule be applied, and how would the third person be secure?

This is school and I think if anyone should have to wear seat belts it would be the younger ones such as those K-5 and by only installing eat belts to designated elementary buses would save money. (Children in middle school and High School should be mature and enough self control to sit in a seat with out putting themselves or anyone else in danger.) All buses have emergency incase there were to be a fine or any other disaster seat belts would only put more children in harms way. By children the time to unfasten a seat belt could also increase the changes of getting hurt. Not to mention the catastrophic possibility of a malfunctioning seat belt which could turn a safety device into a death trap ironically. Finally, there will always be those who disobey the rules and wont compromise and wear their seat belt and cause conflict possibly delaying transportation.

In conclusion I do not think we should have seat belts on school buses. Thank you for taking the time to read this.


 * Revisions **

Previous to the rough draft Te very first sentence was a run on and was corrected with a comma. I had spelling errors such as pertective, wifstand, and takeing. Finally, I forgot to indent before each paragraph I have suffered with this problem frequently.

** In war soldiers have to practically do everything together resembling a brother. At an early age most siblings even bath together. This war unifies soldiers on and accelerated journey of comradeship. In this novel Paul has to make friends to remain sane. As these extremely young men fight for their county, they encounter life’s worst and to cope with them it helps to have a friend or comrade. The term “war buddy” is actually another term to describe a comrade. The death of a comrade depending on the amount of time spent together can be devastating. Yet wait strong bonds comradeship con motivate you. In the novel Paul suffers a manger panic attack in hears the cry of a comrade and is jumped back to life with the thought of his fellow solider in need of assistance. Growing up Paul looks up to Kat a fellow recruit Kat and is like a father figure to him sharing and learning everything together. Quit often Paul is demonstrated as how friendship is more important than anything else, whether it be on leave from active duty, during battle, or recovering from injuries in a hospital. As Paul states “the finest thing to come of the war is comradeship”. For a majority soldiers come into war with nothing and having no one hoping to receive something and find someone. This book has its parts that portray the war as fun with its wild times of sneaking into the houses of French women to playing the role of a security guard as while a soldier receives a conjugal visit. A friend can bring the best of almost any situation and this novel does a great job of displaying it.
 * Literature Writing

Reflection

My portfolio is titled "A Collection of my Tenth Grade Writings" and i thought it would be a good idea to use a simple and conservative title. So, I decided to use this title because this wikispace holds everything that i did in english my sophomore year at Tallwood High School. If I had to pick my favorite piece of writing in my portfolio it would have to be the "Seat Belts on School Bus" essay because it was the essay that i had the most amount of time on and the only one that i am actually proud of. One piece of writing that I would have liked to spend more time on it would be the literature writing and if i had a chance to make one more revision I would have liked to put more examples from the book that would support the points I tried to make. I would like for you to notice my choose of vocabulary and I want you to see how hard I tried to respond to the assignment. If I had to grade myself on this portfolio I would give myself a high C or a low B, I think that this is actually one of my best pieces of work of course not perfect but is a step in the direction of becoming a better writer. It would be nice to read my college essay to the class to maybe show another side of myself.